robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

[death robotics]

razer and o.i.d entered the council room which was the old robot wars arena where all the generals and bots of importance where gathering

sgt behemoth say hello to o.i.d
hi there, see this is your 1st time at a council meeting dont worry i nearly burst my pneumatic canister the 1st time i was here
thanks sgt behemoth

they all gathered near the flame pit and disscussed the situation

slicer arrive just as the meeting started

sorry im late now lets get to buisness
thats ok general slicer now whats the news on the front ambassador chaos 2
sir razer i have grave news that ireland has fallen luckily there general diotor has survived
thanks for the information ambassador now mortis do you have news on the battle bot army
yes sir razer, they have a failed experiment on the loose
whats its name
project dead bot mk1, sir he is destroying battle bots cos he hasnt found the teleport to england
if he finds his way here we will have to make his aquantance, because he will know enemy secrets
o.i.d sat there silent next to sgt behemoth thinking of what to say if he gets involved in the counsil conversation
now there leader biohazard is understood to be extremely ruthless but his son hazard doesnt want world domination he says he wanted peace between robots and rumour has it that he is on his way to england, so we have to make him welcome
i remember now said o.i.d biohazard was my defence teacher at robonia university he said to me one day that there will be an invasion
thanks for the information private o.i.d and panzer mk4 is rumoured to be hiding in newcastle with a scout sqaud, sgt behemoth, corperal ripper take some robot with you

yes sir they both replied
im coming to said o.i.d i want to avenge my father and hypno disc
very well

behemoth ripper and o.i.d headed for the door

[kodster]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

Just a suggestion...

Would it not be beneficial for you to put your chapters in the same thread? Just headline them as Chapter 1 or Chapter 2 etc so people won't get confused. This looks a little more sloppy to be quite frank.

[death robotics]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

very good point but what if people dont notice chapter 3 here though

[kodster]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

Just make the whole story in a new thread, copy the chapters and add more chapters to that thread, that's all.

And make sure to label clearly which chapter is which.

[death robotics]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

chapter 3: the ruins of newcastle

sgt behemoth, ripper, o.i.d and others of the scout force made it to the desolate city of newcastle
o.i.d stared out at the ruins with fear as the city was surround with thick mist and fog

lets keep moving said behemoth
how did this happen said o.i.d
this city has been dormant for five years cos of unexplained explosions but battlebot bombers caused most of the damage here, the old house robots fought a valiant defence against them but in the end were overwhelmed by the growing forces of biohazards army said ripper sadly and turned to a building that had been razed to the ground and let out a tear this was where i grew up and lived until the destruction with my 2 sons, rip and hammer time who dissapeared during the battle he then turned round with a look of determination they could be still be alive, we have to find them

were with you on this right guys said o.i.d
yes were with you

as they made there way through they hear and axe and a flipper firing

they may be them said ripper excited dashing a head, when they got there they saw panzer mk4 battling hammer time
son cried ripper
hammer time turned at the sound of the call and rushed over
dad i missed you i had to survive here for 5 years here against panzers army
sgt behemoth stared at panzer and his squad
damn thats big.... lets take em
they charged at them with speed sending them this way and that as behemoth fought panzer and defeated him

right lets take him back for questioning

[death robotics]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

chapter 4: the journey home

as the group were returning to headquarters hammer time was exchanging a conversation with o.i.d about there past

so you know about me said o.i.d with looking ahead determined what about your past

well..... me and rip were like best mates always training together and talk away through the night.... but then all that changed when newcastle was invaded by panzer, we managed to survived the war and deuled with them for 4 years until War Machine killed rip, ive been on the run for the last year from panzer

what happened to war machine

war machine returned to the us and destroyed the teleporter in newcastle so i could not escape

well here we are.... are you gonna tell ripper about rip

no.. not yet

soz it was short

[corsair_lightning]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

A question: Where are Kody and my bots?

[team_orr]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

yh, there seems to be alot O.I.D :P which isnt a bad thing :wink:

[death robotics]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

next chapter you guys are in

sorry for not introducing you earlier

[death robotics]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

chapter 5: new allies

the group returned to the hideout to hazard outside

help me he cried i cant get this damn thing off me
what is it? said behemoth startled
a tracker device
GOD DAMN IT
a new robot called illusion of dread poked his head out of the door and screamed ive got it and launched hazard in to the air and he slammed on his back, causing the device to shatter as behemoth lifted hazard back on his wheels
thanks guys, ive decided to aid you as my father has gone insane
i want to be a part of this war said illusion of dread because without it ive got no reason to be alive
im joining to said his friend mine sweeper
hazard turned to them ill give you all you need to know and drove up to panzer never come back again... understand
they let panzer go and he scuttled away
now lets get inside... before dad sends his army on us already
illusion of dread looked around and saw battle bots had arrived
oh crap
sound the alarm battle stations every one

[Ellis]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

Type properly (punctuation), it makes it look much more pro, and will give the reader a better idea of the mood and the way things are said, for example.

This: so what he hit me so i hit him back what do you expect
And this: So what?! He hit me, so I hit him back! What do you expect?

...(it sounds like I'm being mean, I'm not, just trying to help )

By the way, I'm loving this so far, keep them coming!

[daliad100]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

Am I right in thinking you're writing these in the box that you use to post?

If so you should really write your story in a word processor so it can (try to) advise you on punctuation etc. then copy and paste the chapter into the box.

[death robotics]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

chapter 6: 1st battle

At the front of the Battlebots army was War Machine. Leading his troops into battle.
Haha said War Machine triumphantly. Give up now. And your life will be spared.
Is this what you want. shouted Hazard with disgust. The end of people who are close to you. Look at Sgt Behemoth. I barley know him. And its as if hes my friend
Silence. said War Machine. Now my loyal Battlebots. Attack!!

The Battlebots charged in earnest. The uk bots held their ground. Behemoth became locked in deadly combat with
T-Minus. Throwing each other clear into the air as Mortis power slammed The Judge repeatedly with his axe and the Judge held his ground and slammed a few blows in.

Ambassador Chaos 2 dashed out the door. Sending middleweights this way and that.
Take that you driods of darkness.

Hammer Time try to fend of War Machine. He held up well. But was at last turned over and ran out of c02.

But luckily Behemoth self righted him. But the battle ended with death for Battlebots as many died for them.
But Hammer Time had the worst impact as Ripper was killed.

Retreat. Screamed War Machine.

They fell back and the uk bots celebrated We did it Hammer Time Shouted o.i.d hammer time.

With his dying breath. Ripper said to Hammer Time avenge me.

Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo Screamed hammer time and hid inside.

[daliad100]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

If you're talking about team ripper's hammer time then I'm pretty sure it's an electric hammer so it can't run out of gas.

[death robotics]

Re: robot wars vs battlebots chapter 2 the counsel meeting

yes i am and i didnt know it was electric but oh well its pneumatic now